[Lnc-business] Resolution Condemning Conversion Therapies

[Joe Bishop-Henchman]

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Joe Bishop-Henchman
LNC Member (At-Large)
joe.bishop-henchman at lp.org
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On 2019-04-16 13:53, Alex Merced (LNC Vice Chair) via Lnc-business 
wrote:
> I sponsor all versions of this
> 
> Alex Merced
> Vice Chair of the Libertarian National Committee/LP
> 
>> On Apr 16, 2019, at 11:42 AM, Caryn Ann Harlos via Lnc-business 
>> <lnc-business at hq.lp.org> wrote:
>> 
>> I’m fine with the grammar - I think we’ve parsed out sentences enough
>> unless there is an additional vote to be gained with the change
>> 
>> On Tue, Apr 16, 2019 at 6:51 AM John Phillips via Lnc-business <
>> lnc-business at hq.lp.org> wrote:
>> 
>>> Starchild's proposed ammendment did not go to the entire list.  So 
>>> here it
>>> is, followed by my disagreement and reasoning.
>>> 
>>> Jeff and all,
>>> 
>>> The second "whereas" clause is grammatically incorrect (a run-on
>>> sentence), and also reads a bit clunky – how would you feel about 
>>> this
>>> language instead?
>>> 
>>> 
>>> *WHEREAS entrusting parents or guardians with custodial rights to act 
>>> on
>>> behalf of their dependent children in certain matters as they mature 
>>> does
>>> not negate other rights retained by children during this period of
>>> dependency, such as their rights to bodily integrity and to determine 
>>> their
>>> own identities, or render non-abusive any coerced actions that would
>>> fundamentally deny these rights;*
>>> 
>>> The fifth "whereas" clause also contains a typo ("it's" should be 
>>> "its"),
>>> and I would also recommend changing "issues" to "areas" and "pursuit" 
>>> to
>>> "context" in that clause.
>>> 
>>> Hope you find these suggestions helpful.
>>> 
>>> Love & Liberty,
>>> 
>>> ((( starchild )))
>>> 
>>> I find that phrasing, while elegant, to not be as strong and clear in 
>>> its
>>> phrasing. "Does not negate other rights ..." Is too open ended 
>>> despite the
>>> "such as" that follows.  There are things we see as absolute rights 
>>> for
>>> adults that are negated or lessened during childhood in regards to
>>> parenting.
>>> 
>>> The last section " or render non-abusive..." is not as strong or 
>>> clear in
>>> intent or function as a simple declaritive that the coerced actions
>>> described in the previous version are abusive.
>>> 
>>> Simply adding a comma after inalienable in the previous version  the
>>> run-on/flow issue while maintaining the strength abd clarity.
>>> 
>>> Obviously no objection to correcting the typo of "it's". I also find 
>>> his
>>> other suggested word changes in the 5th whereas an improvement.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> John Phillips
>>> Libertarian National Committee Region 6 Representative
>>> Cell 217-412-5973
>>> 
>> --
>> 
>> *  In Liberty,*
>> 
>> *Libertarian Party and Libertarian National Committee Secretary *- 
>> Caryn.Ann.
>> Harlos at LP.org <Caryn.Ann.Harlos at LP.org> or Secretary at LP.org.
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