[Lnc-business] Resolution Condemning Conversion Therapies

[Alex Merced (LNC Vice Chair)]

I sponsor all versions of this

Alex Merced
Vice Chair of the Libertarian National Committee/LP

> On Apr 16, 2019, at 11:42 AM, Caryn Ann Harlos via Lnc-business <lnc-business at hq.lp.org> wrote:
> 
> I’m fine with the grammar - I think we’ve parsed out sentences enough
> unless there is an additional vote to be gained with the change
> 
> On Tue, Apr 16, 2019 at 6:51 AM John Phillips via Lnc-business <
> lnc-business at hq.lp.org> wrote:
> 
>> Starchild's proposed ammendment did not go to the entire list.  So here it
>> is, followed by my disagreement and reasoning.
>> 
>> Jeff and all,
>> 
>> The second "whereas" clause is grammatically incorrect (a run-on
>> sentence), and also reads a bit clunky – how would you feel about this
>> language instead?
>> 
>> 
>> *WHEREAS entrusting parents or guardians with custodial rights to act on
>> behalf of their dependent children in certain matters as they mature does
>> not negate other rights retained by children during this period of
>> dependency, such as their rights to bodily integrity and to determine their
>> own identities, or render non-abusive any coerced actions that would
>> fundamentally deny these rights;*
>> 
>> The fifth "whereas" clause also contains a typo ("it's" should be "its"),
>> and I would also recommend changing "issues" to "areas" and "pursuit" to
>> "context" in that clause.
>> 
>> Hope you find these suggestions helpful.
>> 
>> Love & Liberty,
>> 
>> ((( starchild )))
>> 
>> I find that phrasing, while elegant, to not be as strong and clear in its
>> phrasing. "Does not negate other rights ..." Is too open ended despite the
>> "such as" that follows.  There are things we see as absolute rights for
>> adults that are negated or lessened during childhood in regards to
>> parenting.
>> 
>> The last section " or render non-abusive..." is not as strong or clear in
>> intent or function as a simple declaritive that the coerced actions
>> described in the previous version are abusive.
>> 
>> Simply adding a comma after inalienable in the previous version  the
>> run-on/flow issue while maintaining the strength abd clarity.
>> 
>> Obviously no objection to correcting the typo of "it's". I also find his
>> other suggested word changes in the 5th whereas an improvement.
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> John Phillips
>> Libertarian National Committee Region 6 Representative
>> Cell 217-412-5973
>> 
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